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My world wasn't enough for you, nor was my all
My weakness is I can' t do much, much at all
Maybe it was my fault by being foolish enough to believe in such gambles
Maybe it was my fault to fall into these cursed shambles

Thou art My Juliet and I thou Romeo
Seems like how things ended up I'm in the worse Brother Romeo
Seems like this ended like the end of Macbeth
Leaving me assimilated with eternal death

They say God is in the rain
But all I feel is my floundering heart in the cliché of pain
What you found in peace you left in pieces
What you left behind never ceases

My love was your disposable commodity
Now leaving me to move on with this life of mediocrity
These scars remind me that the past was in fact real
That the love I felt for you was joke that would never heal

Maybe it was pathetic of me to sulk over you
Seeing how it took you no time to get over me and start anew
I carried your hardships on my deteriorating shoulders
As I fought and pushed away the monsters and boulders

I was enchanted and mesmerised by our uncorruptible bond
Little did I know you were using love's devious magic wand
You severed my heart and for that I thank you for
You put my life in a cold pandemonium like never before

I now live in an empyrean embodied by enmities and loves
I am now in peace living with Pandora's penance and flying doves
Hope has released me from this zealous den
As I now choose to live life by the Pen
I poem I wrote ages ago when times were not so nice and well hard
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LaColombeDeDeuil Featured By Owner Nov 17, 2012  Professional General Artist
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~~ I found this one stopped me like a wall. I have seen that valley you traveled through and have so very well written of it here. I believe that poetry should be written like Stephen Dunn states on his website. He states that the words need not rhyme nor join in any dance on meter but are the illumination of the poet's soul into the illumination of the mind and let go on paper. Once that is done he states and I believe the poet has no more control over what people glean from the poet's baby so to speak. Here in this work you have stated very well the pain and agony of the heart. I can feel it in your work. This is amazing and will be featured on my front page under Artist's That Move Me. ~~

always,
katti
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TheFableTeller Featured By Owner Feb 8, 2013  Student Writer
thankyou I appreciate it :D
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ShopKey Featured By Owner Feb 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is so cool! I've got nothing to criticize well done!
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KaieraAi Featured By Owner Dec 30, 2011  Student Writer
I really like this one. It's very interesting and the lines are very strong. There were a few little areas that you might want to read over, like i got the picture, but the rhyme wasn't as strong, but besides that, even with those few breaks in rhythm that I found, it is really a magnificent piece and very beautifully written. :)
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TheFableTeller Featured By Owner Jan 11, 2012  Student Writer
thanks :)
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SapphireTheLovely Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
this is amazing
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TheFableTeller Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011  Student Writer
Thankyou :)
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SapphireTheLovely Featured By Owner Nov 22, 2011  Hobbyist Writer
your welcome
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Nooryii Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011
(Y) Amazingly written. (:
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TheFableTeller Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011  Student Writer
Once again thank you very much :)
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TheFableTeller Featured By Owner Nov 21, 2011  Student Writer
Thanks so much :D
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